BEC名師點評作文（10）
BEC商務英語考試在現在的考試形式占有重要的地位，當今社會不論是學生還是職場人都在努力的奮斗這提升自己的能力和晉升的空間，那么我們該怎么樣復習好BEC英語呢!
我覺得用中文寫一篇高質量的圖表說明文很不簡單，何況用英文，必須對圖表的總體特征、主要對象走勢、最大值、最小值、轉折點等關鍵點做出簡明扼要的陳述。好在說明文相對比較機械，還是有規律可循。我對課堂資料進行了一番整理，總結出一些常用句型和詞匯，背誦了幾篇范文，很快就上手了。下面是一些老師的點評，希望對大家有所幫助。
本期作文題目：
You are a regional salesman for an officeequipment supplier. You are organising yourschedule for visiting your existing clients nextmonth.
Write an e-mail of 40-50 words to one of yourclients:
*explaining why you would like to visit them
*proposing a time to visit
*asking them to suggest an alternative ifnecessary.
Sample:
Dear Mr. Shultz:
Our new catalogue is now ready. I will be in your city on 16th December and would be ableto visit your office to discuss our special Winter offers with you then. Please let me know if thiswould be convenient or contact me to suggest an alternative.
網友作文一：
Dear Mr. Smith,
I would like to visit you to discuss about the detail price and function of our officeequipment that you want to buy. So I am planning to visit you at this weekend. [1] Is itavailable for you? If it is not,[2] please suggest me an alternative.
With best regards,
Yours sincerely,
Ellen
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[1]啰嗦。如果要用定語從句，建議改為：that we offered. 后句去掉。
[2]合二為一。If that is not available for you, please suggest an alternative.
網友作文二：
To: Jim
From: Sant
Subject: Visiting Schedule
In order to talk with you on the conditions and items of the insurance policy, I attempt tovisit you on 22th November. Provided that the date is unconvenient for you ,do not hesitate tosuggest me the alternative days. [1]
Regards!
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[1]這個過去分詞出師無名，句子主體是沒有主語的，這是祈使句。建議把句子補齊，把主語添上。
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