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The graph shows that how trend the user number of cell phone have changed over the past few decades. From the chart,the figure goes up between 1999 and 2005. In 1999, there were only 200 users. But until 2002, the number almost doubled. In 2005, the total number of users was four times than the number in 1999 aiming at 950.
There are several causes for this dramatic growth in cell phone users.Firstly, the development of science and technology has a great effect on the communication industry. Secondly, in our daily life, cell phones will enable people to do something conveniently and efficiency.Finally, cell phones may make our life become more beautiful and interesting.For example, we can use it to listen to music or play games and so on.
As far as I am concerned, it is necessary for us to use cell phone everyday. Nowadays we cannot live without cell phones. The cell phone has such advantages that it will be also popular in the future.
作文批改如下：
The graph shows that how trend the user number of cell phone have changed(改為 the number of cell phone users has changed) over（the past few decades（從1999到2005不是過去幾十年內(nèi)發(fā)生的變化，表達(dá)不準(zhǔn)確）. From the chart, the figure goes(改為went) up between 1999 and 2005. In 1999, there were only 200 users. But until 2002, the number almost doubled. In 2005, the total number of users was four times than the number(改為that) in 1999 aiming at 950.
There are several causes for this dramatic growth in（加 the number of） cell phone users. Firstly, the development of science and technology has a great effect on the communication industry. Secondly, in our daily life, cell phones will enable people to do something conveniently and efficiency(改為efficiently). Finally, cell phones may make our life become more beautiful and interesting. For example, we can use it to listen to music or play games and so on.
As far as I am concerned, it is necessary for us to use cell phone every day. Nowadays we cannot live without cell phones. The cell phone has such advantages that it will be also popular in the future.
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