2017年12月大學英語四級作文行文思路
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write A Letter Applying for a Bank Loan. You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below in Chinese：
1)簡單介紹個人情況
2)說明申請助學貸款的原因、數額
3)保證會合理利用貸款并表明還款的決心
A Letter Applying for a Bank Loan
行文思路
本題屬于情景式命題，要求寫一封申請信。根據所給提綱，本文應包含如下內容：簡單介紹自己的情況，表明寫信目的：申請助學貸款;說明申請助學貸款的原因、數額;保證合理利用貸款并表明還款決心，最后表示感謝。
高分范文
A Letter Applying for a Bank Loan
Sep 12th, 2008
To whom it may concern,
I am a freshman of Lianhe University, [1]majoring in Applied Physics. I am writing in the hope that I may obtain a bank loan to support my study in Applied Physics for the following four years.
My parents are both laid-off workers, so it’s [2]beyond their power to finance me through the college education. [3]To make matters worse, my mother has suddenly fallen ill and is expecting a major operation. [4]Therefore, [5]with the college tuition becoming a much heavier burden on my family, I am compelled to apply a RMB20,000 bank loan.
[6]I give you my promise that the loan would be used properly. [4]Meanwhile, I’ll [7]spare no effort to work hard both in the study and my future career in order to pay back the loan. I would be greatly obliged if my application is granted. And I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Sincerely yours,
Song Xue
【亮點點評】
[1]“主修…”，現在分詞作伴隨狀語。
[2]“超出…的能力范圍”。
[3]“使事情更糟糕的是”。
[4]過渡銜接詞語，使文章條理清晰、銜接緊密。
[5]“with+賓語+賓補”的獨立結構。
[6]“我保證…”，that引導同位語從句。
[7]“不遺余力”。
佳句臨摩
1.佳句：To make matters worse, my mother has suddenly fallen ill and is expecting a major operation.
臨摩：令人更迷惑不解的是，很多飛機都從大海上離奇消失了。
2.佳句：Therefore, the college tuition becoming a much heavier burden on my family, I am compelled to apply a RMB20,000 bank loan.
臨摩：由于周圍交通不便利，人們只得步行回家。
3.佳句：Meanwhile, I’ll spare no effort to work hard both in the study and my future career in order to pay back the loan.
臨摩：全國人民都不遺余力地支持北京舉辦奧運會1.練好口語，順便考試拿高分....這是李陽老師的名言。
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