英語(yǔ)六級(jí)14分作文范文批改1
英語(yǔ)六級(jí)待批改作文：
The chart is used to illustrate the change that the number of users is increasing. It shows there were only 200 users in 1999, but it surged to 500 in a short span of three years. And in the next three years, the number is twice as much as it's in 2002.
There are two reasons to explain this phenomenon. At first, with the development of technology, the phones are lower in price and more plentiful in function. Moreover, the society and the relationship with others require you to use cell phone to keep connection.
It is convenient to keep in touch with others, especially in the modern world, you are always waiting the calls by your boss, your colleagues and even your friends who want to chat with you. It looks like a net which tangle you. I don't mean it is bad or something negtive, but remember, let your mind "escape" from the calls occasionally.
英語(yǔ)六級(jí)作文批改如下：
The chart is used to illustrate the change that the number of users is increasing. It shows there were only 200 users in 1999, but it surged to 500 in a short span of three years. And in the next three years(最好明確指出年份）, the number is(改為was) twice as much asit's(it was) in 2002.
There are two reasons to explain this phenomenon. At first, with the development of technology, the phones are lower in price and more plentiful in function. Moreover, the society and the relationship with others(刪除) require you to use cell phone to keep connection.
It is convenient to keep in touch with others, especially in the modern world, （改為句號(hào)）you are always waiting the calls by（改為from） your boss, your colleagues and even your friends who want to chat with you. It looks like a net which tangle(加s) you. I don't mean it is bad or something negtive(拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤，改為nagative), but remember, let your mind "escape(加s)" from the calls occasionally.
同學(xué)你好，你的英語(yǔ)基礎(chǔ)不錯(cuò)，用詞等都很好，但是要保持時(shí)態(tài)一致。另外，第三段的時(shí)候，你用了tangle這個(gè)詞，已經(jīng)表明你的態(tài)度是negative了，可是你后面又解釋了一下。在四六級(jí)作文中，盡量明確表明你的態(tài)度，否則判卷老師很有可能認(rèn)為你沒(méi)有自己的觀點(diǎn)。
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