本周雅思寫作話題：Children find it difficult to concentrate on or pay attention to their study in school. What are the reasons? How can we solve this problem?

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孩子們?yōu)槭裁床荒軐Ｐ膶W(xué)習(xí)?原因無非就是內(nèi)因和外因。外因很容易找到，網(wǎng)絡(luò)游戲的干擾，電視節(jié)目的干擾，或者課本太枯燥無聊等等，內(nèi)因也容易發(fā)現(xiàn)，比如現(xiàn)在有很多宣傳，不需要讀書也能成功，這樣孩子們就沒有學(xué)習(xí)的動力了。解決辦法也很簡單、直接，比如控制孩子們使用網(wǎng)絡(luò)的時間，同時告訴孩子們讀書的重要性(即使不能掙錢，也能讓你的生活更充實和幸福)。按照這樣的邏輯寫，輕松愉快，烤鴨需要注意的就剩下控制語言錯誤，控制模板使用，盡量體現(xiàn)出自己的寫作個性來。

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Students ought to spend most of their time on the school work, but nowadays it is not uncommon that students are simply not able to put their heart to study.

(1) 本段是開頭段，使用的開門見山法，直接提出現(xiàn)象，但在用詞上并不照抄題目，而是體現(xiàn)出變化。

(2) It is not uncommon that... ......并不罕見

(3) Put one’s heart to... 集中精力做......

There could be two reasons why this happens. First, today the students are surrounded by so many distractions that they gradually find that learning is too boring and uninteresting. While students two decades ago had nearly no choice but sit in the classroom and read books, students today have easy and fast access to Internet, on which they can do almost all things. For instance, they can play computer games, watch videos, search for any information they need, and chat with their friends, to mention just a few. So, having been used to this kind of“easy” online life, many young people simply cannot put their heart into the more serious and consuming school work.

(1)本段分析學(xué)生不喜歡學(xué)習(xí)的第一個理由，也是淺層次的外部理由：學(xué)生因為外部干擾(尤其是互聯(lián)網(wǎng)的干擾)而討厭學(xué)習(xí)。本段的論證思路是：學(xué)生發(fā)現(xiàn)學(xué)習(xí)無趣--比較今天的學(xué)生和20年前的學(xué)生--舉例今天的學(xué)生可以在網(wǎng)上做什么--上網(wǎng)的結(jié)果就是不愿意再認(rèn)真學(xué)習(xí)。注意與這個思路匹配的是一些常用句型。比如：while...; so, having done..., they...

(2)Distraction: 干擾

(3)Access：進(jìn)入;使用

(4)To name just a few：如此等等;諸如此類

(5)Consuming 耗費的(比如time-consuming耗時的;energy-consuming耗能量的)

Another important factor that affects the students' attitude towards their school work is that a good education seems not as important as before. For quite a long time, receiving a good education was the only way for young people to get a decent job and earn a high salary. But now, this is apparently not the case any more. Influenced by business stars like Bill Gates and Steve Jobs, many young people now begin to believe that one’s success does not have much to do the education s/he receives. The students, therefore, are not motivated enough to focus on their learning.

(1)本段討論學(xué)生不喜歡學(xué)習(xí)的另一個原因，也是更深層次的內(nèi)在原因：學(xué)生不再相信只有受教育才能成功了。本段的論證思路是：主題句--以前的情況--現(xiàn)在的情況--結(jié)論。在論證的過程中，順便舉出一些例子，可以展示考生的知識面，同時增強(qiáng)作文的個性化。

(2)Factor 因素

(3)Decent 體面的

(4)Apparently 表面看地;明顯地

(5)Motivated 有動力的

As education of the young is so important to the future of the world, we ought to find ways out of this embarrassing situation. For example, the school and parents should work together to set limitson the time children spend online. Internet is a good great invention, yet obsession with it will certainly reduce the time that should have been put to more serious work. Besides, young people should be made to understand that life is not just about making money, but about having rich and colorful experience and education is the best gateway to that rewarding life. (349 words)

(1)本段針對前面兩個原因提出解決方案。本段論證思路是：需要找到解決辦法--第一個辦法是限制學(xué)生上網(wǎng)時間--過多上網(wǎng)的壞處--第二個辦法是讓學(xué)生明白讀書的意義是擁有更豐富精彩的生活。

(1) Embarrassing 令人尷尬的

(2) Set limits on... 給......設(shè)限

(3) Obsession (with) 沉迷(于......)

(4) Gateway 通路

(5) Rewarding 有回報的;有價值的

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