考研英語小作文批改：投訴信0-4分例文5
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英語復(fù)習(xí)資料：作文范文批改，考研頻道編輯整理。
考研英語待批改作文：
0-4分
第五篇
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am the one who bought a mobile phone from your online store in July 1. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the problems after using it for a short period of time.
The reason for my dissatisfaction is that the phone can not meet my requirements. In the first place, the battery needs recharging after 5 hours of use. In addition, the internal mernory is too small to store a song. Under these circumstances, I find it is regretful to bring the trouble which I can not accept it.
I appreciate it very much if you could change the mpbile phone for another model that works well, preferably return the full refund, and I would like to have this matter settled by 20 workdays.
Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
考研英語作文批改點(diǎn)評如下：
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am the one who bought a mobile phone from your online store in July 1. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the problems after using it for a short period of time.
The reason for my dissatisfaction is that the phone can not meet my requirements. In the first place, the battery needs recharging after 5 hours of use. In addition, the internal mernory（單詞拼寫錯(cuò)誤,改為memory card） is too small to store a song. Under these circumstances, I find it is（刪除） regretful to bring the trouble which I can not accept it.（該句的意思是，由于上面提到的兩個(gè)問題，使我感覺…）
I appreciate it very much if you could change the mpbile（單詞拼寫錯(cuò)誤，改為mobile） phone for another model that works well, preferably return the full refund(改為 give me a full refund), and I would like to have this matter settled by 20 workdays.
Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
3分
考研小作文的字?jǐn)?shù)要求是100詞，不要超過太多，考試時(shí)間很緊張，把過多的時(shí)間用在寫小作文上是不合理的。一定要正確理解形式賓語。
小作文很重視作文的邏輯性，因此不要在邏輯方面出現(xiàn)大的問題，這篇作文中，由于你對形式賓語的理解偏差，導(dǎo)致這篇作文的邏輯出現(xiàn)問題，這會對分?jǐn)?shù)產(chǎn)生很大影響。
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0-4分
第五篇
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am the one who bought a mobile phone from your online store in July 1. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the problems after using it for a short period of time.
The reason for my dissatisfaction is that the phone can not meet my requirements. In the first place, the battery needs recharging after 5 hours of use. In addition, the internal mernory is too small to store a song. Under these circumstances, I find it is regretful to bring the trouble which I can not accept it.
I appreciate it very much if you could change the mpbile phone for another model that works well, preferably return the full refund, and I would like to have this matter settled by 20 workdays.
Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
考研英語作文批改點(diǎn)評如下：
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am the one who bought a mobile phone from your online store in July 1. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the problems after using it for a short period of time.
The reason for my dissatisfaction is that the phone can not meet my requirements. In the first place, the battery needs recharging after 5 hours of use. In addition, the internal mernory（單詞拼寫錯(cuò)誤,改為memory card） is too small to store a song. Under these circumstances, I find it is（刪除） regretful to bring the trouble which I can not accept it.（該句的意思是，由于上面提到的兩個(gè)問題，使我感覺…）
I appreciate it very much if you could change the mpbile（單詞拼寫錯(cuò)誤，改為mobile） phone for another model that works well, preferably return the full refund(改為 give me a full refund), and I would like to have this matter settled by 20 workdays.
Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
3分
考研小作文的字?jǐn)?shù)要求是100詞，不要超過太多，考試時(shí)間很緊張，把過多的時(shí)間用在寫小作文上是不合理的。一定要正確理解形式賓語。
小作文很重視作文的邏輯性，因此不要在邏輯方面出現(xiàn)大的問題，這篇作文中，由于你對形式賓語的理解偏差，導(dǎo)致這篇作文的邏輯出現(xiàn)問題，這會對分?jǐn)?shù)產(chǎn)生很大影響。
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