2015考研英語看圖作文范例點評：水污染
編輯整合了一系列考研英語作文，并附有批注和全文的點評，希望大家能夠通過不同的話題，針對范例中的錯誤進行自我修正，從而提高寫作水平。
2015考研英語看圖作文范例點評：水污染
寫作原文
As is vividly depicted in the picture, two drain pipes are draining much sewage into the river while some chimneys emit poison gas into the sky.(首段內容較為簡略，可適當添加)Why do(改為does) our environment get more and more bad(表達有誤，“越來越糟”應表示為worse and worse)? The main reason is(后面若要跟句子，就應該用從句來表述，加that) there are a lot of factories that(去掉) emit so much sewage and poison gas that aren't purified into our nature directly. Besides, we don't have a few good habits, so you can see littering, spitting and smoking frequently. There are so many people who are using plastic bag.Of course, we need plenty of factories because they will promote the development of our economy. But does it mean that our environment has to be contaminated? Our economy must be development(此處應選擇動詞，改為developed), but it shouldn't be at the expense of the pollution of our environment. We shouldn't be so selfish that we disregard the next generation. (一句話中出現兩個we，不妥，建議作者將此句話改為：We shouldn’t be selfish to disregard to the next generation )We must protect our environment! On the one hand, it isn't until we dispose of sewage and poison gas that we can emit . On the other hand, we must encourage people to give up the bad habit(改為habits).Let's work together to have a beautiful country!
總體點評
文章結構清晰，內容完整。看著你的作文一天天有所提升，我們為你感到高興，這些都是你努力的結果。但是，文章中的一些小問題還是值得注意，比如一句話中最好不要出現兩個相同的單詞，遇到這種情況時，可以換一種思路，想想這個句子能不能用其他結構表達，或者該詞能不能用它的近義詞代替等。之前強調的作者應該繼續堅持。
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