社會環境描寫:是公共汽車還是罐頭筒？-A Bus or a Can？
是公共汽車還是罐頭筒？
【內容提示】
擠公共汽車上下班、上下學是住在城市中的成人和學生每天遇到的頭疼事。請你就這一主題寫一篇描寫文。主要內容如下：
①你每天乘坐65路車上學。
②65路車上有許多令人傷感的事。
③人們不等車上的人下來就擠著上車。
④有時車上人多關不住門。
⑤有時車上人擠得水泄不通，抱怨聲、哭聲、喊聲、罵聲隨即而起。
⑥在車上吵架更是家常便飯。
⑦你感到困惑：乘這種車遭這種罪何時是盡頭？
【作文示范】
A Bus or a Can？
“Good heavens!”I always sigh with relief when I get off Bus No. 65.
There are many stories of sadness and sorrows about Bus No. 65, which I take every day on my way to school.
It is usual for me to wait for over ten minutes at the bus stop without seeing a bus coming during the rush hour. This causes more and more people to gather. Among them are those rushing to work, peasants going to the railway station with heavy luggage and students going to school with schoolbags on their shoulders.
When finally a bus arrives, people will force their way into it when it is still moving. The doors open, men try hard to be the first to get on. They don＇t even wait for the passengers on the bus to get off!
In a while, the bus is filled again. It is so full that the conductor has difficulty closing the doors. A few people are forced to step off. Even so, the doors still can not close fast. So some warm-hearted men have to push hard on the backs of the few who are only half in and kick the doors close.
Sometimes it is impossible for you to buy a ticket, for if you try to turn around it will cause complaints from others. I often feel as if I were so tightly tied that I were almost out of breath. Complaints, CRIes, angry curses① and quarrels soon fill my ears.
“I＇m almost breathless!” an old lady murmurs.
“My handbag! Where is it? ”shouts someone.
“Move a bit, can＇t you? You＇re stepping on my toe!”another CRIes angrily.
“Why on earth do you push your elbow ② against my stomach?”still another protests③.
“Those villagers! Throw them out! See how many big bags they carry with them!”Many shout in one voice.
Babies let out screams of frights and sufferings.
Although I am so used do quarrels that I am almost not caring about them, yet I very much wish I could turn my ears away from these noises. I can＇t help wondering whether I am one of the sardines ④ packed tightly in a can.
When at last I am pushed on the bus by the gate of my school, I am often troubled by such a question,“When will all my sufferings of taking Bus No. 65 end?”
【詞語解釋】
①curse [k :s] n. 咒罵；咒語
②elbow [＇elb u] n. 肘；肘部
③protest [pr u＇test] v. 抗議；反對；明言
④sardine [sa:＇di:n] n. 沙丁魚
【寫法指要】
本文通過乘坐公共汽車這樣一件極普通的事生動地描寫了人們社會生活環境的惡劣，暴露了社會風尚的低下。作者在觸接這一主題時擷取了許多活生生的事例：等車、擠車、關門、買票、怨聲、呼喊、哭叫、生氣、咒罵、踩腳趾、爭吵、肘頂腹部、丟手提包、扛麻袋、嬰兒啼哭等等。最后，作者以提問的方式呼吁解決這一社會癥結。整篇文章有客觀性描寫，也有印象性描寫，二者結合得天衣無縫。
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