英語四級2分作文范文批改1
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This chart vividly described that the consumers of cell phones have increasd,from1999 to 2005. In 1999,there are 200 nunmber of people. In 2002,the consumers have changed more than 400 number of people. To 2005,the number of consumers have less than 1000 number of people.
How to account for this situation? there are a great number of things. Firstly, more and more people want to communicate each other. Secondly, with the increased of economics ,cell phones become greatly significant. Thirdly, cell phones have changed apart of life .people depends on it. Surely ,there are even more element.
To my opinion ,this phenomena accumulate cell phones have become more than significant. More and more people realize that cell phones is necessary and cell phones have changed the style of people's life. Yet, the consumers depends on cell phones and cell phones influence people.
作文批改如下：
This chart vividly described that the consumers of cell phones have(刪除) increasd（拼寫錯誤，改為increased）,（刪除逗號）from1999 to 2005. In 1999,there are（改為were） 200 nunmber of(刪除) people（加Using it）. In 2002, the consumers have changed more than 400 number of people(改為the number of consumers changed to more than 400). To(改為In) 2005, the number of consumers have less than 1000 number of people.（改為was near to 1000）
How to (改為what reasons)account for this situation? there are a great number of things（改為factors）. Firstly, more and more people want to communicate each other. Secondly, with the increased(改為increase) of economics(改為economy) ,cell phones become greatly significant. Thirdly, cell phones have changed apart of life(改為people’s life) .people depends on it. Surely,there are even more element.(刪除)
To（改為In） my opinion ,this phenomena(改為phenomenon) accumulate cell phones have become more than significant（一句話里不能有兩個謂語動詞）. More and more people realize that cell phones is（改為are） necessary and cell phones have changed the style of people's life(改為people’s lifestyle). Yet, the consumers depends on cell phones and cell phones influence people(同上，一句話中不能有兩個謂語動詞)
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