英語六級5分作文范文批改1
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英語六級待批改作文：
In this chat, we learn about that people use cell phone is increasing speedy. Compared with 1999, it is more than twice in 2002.And 2005 compare with 2002 is twice times. We pay attention to new electronic technology which has been used into cell phone. It makes that many function like surfing Internet, taking photos, playing games, handling works, storing up files into cell phones, which makes our life convenient. When a kind of technology has been produced largely, its cost will be reduced. So, we always can use the most advanced cell phones with suitable price. In my opinion, so much electronic equipment that we use everyday will be changed into one terminal, I don’t know what to call it, but it will have all current functions and we can’t image out functions.
作文批改如下：
In this chat（改為chart）, we learn about that (加the number of )people use(改為using) cell phone is(改為was) increasingspeedy（改為rapidly）. Compared with 1999, it is(改為was) more than twice in 2002.And 2005 compare with 2002 is twice times(有語病). We pay attention to new electronic technology which has been used into cell phone. It makes that many function（make …do是個固定搭配） like surfing Internet, taking photos, playing games, handling works, storing up files into cell phones, which makes our life convenient. When a kind of technology has been produced largely, its cost will be reduced. So, we always can（改為can always） use the most advanced cell phones with suitable price. In my opinion, so much electronic equipment that we use every day will be changed into one terminal, ｛I don’t know what to call it｝, but it will have all current functions and we can’t image out functions.（不能理解你的意思）
同學你好，你的英語基礎比較薄弱，一個句子中只能有一個謂語動詞。最后一段如果不會寫你想要表達的內容，那么就要換一個你會寫的觀點，像你最后一段中提到，I don’t know…,這是在寫作文，不要出現這么口語的句子，第二段開頭要寫一句，表明你下面要寫的原因。
本文標題：英語六級5分作文范文批改1 - 英語六級作文_六級作文_六級英語作文_四六級作文In this chat, we learn about that people use cell phone is increasing speedy. Compared with 1999, it is more than twice in 2002.And 2005 compare with 2002 is twice times. We pay attention to new electronic technology which has been used into cell phone. It makes that many function like surfing Internet, taking photos, playing games, handling works, storing up files into cell phones, which makes our life convenient. When a kind of technology has been produced largely, its cost will be reduced. So, we always can use the most advanced cell phones with suitable price. In my opinion, so much electronic equipment that we use everyday will be changed into one terminal, I don’t know what to call it, but it will have all current functions and we can’t image out functions.
作文批改如下：
In this chat（改為chart）, we learn about that (加the number of )people use(改為using) cell phone is(改為was) increasingspeedy（改為rapidly）. Compared with 1999, it is(改為was) more than twice in 2002.And 2005 compare with 2002 is twice times(有語病). We pay attention to new electronic technology which has been used into cell phone. It makes that many function（make …do是個固定搭配） like surfing Internet, taking photos, playing games, handling works, storing up files into cell phones, which makes our life convenient. When a kind of technology has been produced largely, its cost will be reduced. So, we always can（改為can always） use the most advanced cell phones with suitable price. In my opinion, so much electronic equipment that we use every day will be changed into one terminal, ｛I don’t know what to call it｝, but it will have all current functions and we can’t image out functions.（不能理解你的意思）
同學你好，你的英語基礎比較薄弱，一個句子中只能有一個謂語動詞。最后一段如果不會寫你想要表達的內容，那么就要換一個你會寫的觀點，像你最后一段中提到，I don’t know…,這是在寫作文，不要出現這么口語的句子，第二段開頭要寫一句，表明你下面要寫的原因。
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