Some people think schools should only teach students academic knowledge. Others think they should also teach students to judge what is right and wrong. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
　　Generally speaking, there are two opinions about school’s function, ( 這種錯誤非常細小，但是一般也只有 Chinese English 中才看得到。逗號是不能連接句子和句子的！！！漢語里可以，英語絕不可以 ) some people think school is a place for student （可數名詞除固定短語中，一般要么前面加冠詞要么本身是復數！） to learn academic knowledge only while others hold the opposite view that school （同上，可數名詞不能這樣用！） should teach students the ability （個人認為能力是培養的而不是教的！動賓搭配不當！） to judge what is right or wrong as well. For my part, I’m more prone to the latter view （典型的 Chinese English! 去查一下字典 prone 怎么用的！當然要查英英詞典 To be prone to something, usually something bad, means to have a tendency to be affected by it or to do it. ） .
　　結構分析：典型的雅思大作文手段寫法： 2+1’，即前兩句引題，最后一句表達自己的觀點。
　　語言分析：其實第 1 段讀下來還是比較通順的，意思表達也比較容易理解。只是，從更嚴謹的層面分析，還是在語言表達上存在著一些中文的痕跡。起評分： 6 分。
　　School （錯誤與第 1 段相同，看來這位作者對可數名詞的用法掌握的不好，去查一下語法書吧：可數名詞除固定短語中，一般要么前面加冠詞要么本身是復數！ ） is, no doubt, a place to learn academic knowledge （表達方式與第 1 段一模一樣，能不能換個表達方式， native speaker 不喜歡經常重復相同的內容和表達） , from which we can get to know many new things and phenomena happened （這里應該用 happening ！） surrounding us with the help of teachers and good facilities.
　　結構分析： 1 ’ +0 ！！！整段居然只有一句話，如果寫得好也可以接受。但是，此段明顯在內容上比較空洞！雅思作文不需要你侃侃而談，但是至少要有一定的內容來支持你的觀點。如果缺少足夠的論證內容，那么在內容上會扣分。
　　語言分析：作者在語言方面還是比較穩的，沒有大起大落，所犯的錯誤也比較統一！呵呵。。。
　　However, I don’t think teaching academic knowledge is the only target of education. I believe other things such as integrity, the ability of judging good and evil, right and wrong are, if not far more important than, at least as important as academic knowledge. （這句話還可以的。用了一個句型： A is, if not better than, as good as B ） If these people who are good at mastering knowledge have an evil heart, they can’t make any contribution to our society; while on the contrary, a lot of harm could be done. （這句太有問題了，首先和前半句的銜接處理地不好，其次， while 這里應該是連詞啊！要么把前面的分號改成逗號！）
　　語言分析：作者的語言四平八穩的，除了最后一句有些失水準，段中還有一句比較好的句子。
　　內容分析 : 作者給我的感覺是語言比較簡練！但是，好像也太簡練了，適當再多一點論證的內容。
　　On the other side （是 hand 吧， side 似乎也通，但是我比較保守） , we can never judge a person’s quality by how much knowledge he (she) knows just like （口語里面可以這樣用，但是在嚴格的書面語中還是用 just as 比較好） we can’t judge a book by its appearance （是 cover 啦！你前面寫的是 book 不是 person ！） . Our society needs these people who （地道的說法是 those who ） can serve it well. An all-around person with a noble heart as well as a profound understanding of academic knowledge is the most popular in this competitive society.
　　To put all into a nutshell, cultivating the students’ ability to judge right and wrong is the responsibility of our schools. Our school should pay more attention to this responsibility without ignoring the importance of academic knowledge. (263 words)
　　最后一段到寫的不錯。
　　總評：作者的語言水平還是不錯的，一看至少有 6 分。但是亮點好像不夠，很難到 7-8 分，另外語言方面還不夠嚴謹，經常有中文的痕跡。這個的確比較難提高，寫作的確能衡量出一個人真實的英語能力！
　　總分： 6 分。

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