Some people think the housing shortage in big cities can only be solved by the government. Do you agree or disagree?
　　In major cities, problem(可數名詞前面既沒有冠詞，又是單數！避免這種用法，改成problems更好些) with housing shortage seems to have climbed at an alarming rate. So some people hold that the unique solution for（solution后接to） the problem depends on government action. To be frank, I’m in high favor that the problem of housing shortage is the responsibility of not only governments but also individuals and enterprises. （55words）
　　結構分析：2+1’的模式，最后一句正面提出了自己的觀點。2句背景介紹句也寫得不錯。詞數55個，稍微有些多，但即使這樣也沒有任何問題。唯一的瑕疵就是紅色部分的問題，但是屬于很小的錯誤，不怎么影響。
　　語言方面：由于語法錯誤不是很多（幾乎沒有），所以6分是可以保證的，關鍵是要拿7分以上的話，語言的多樣性方面要求就高了！此段，作者這方面還是做的不錯的，句型還是比較豐富的，所以起評分7分。
　　Like any else（和后面的句子連起來，總覺得很便扭！）, enterprises are in pursuit of maximization of profits, taking no consideration of the reasonable utilization of land(可以簡潔地寫成land utilization). Big companies and factories located in the city centre due to convenience in business exchange and transportation（這句話的謂語動詞呢？！難道是located?那么應該是are located in）. However these gigantic companies and factories have taken up so many places on city(?) that there are few lands resources(名詞作定語要用其原形，即land)  can be used in housing. (62words)
　　結構分析：1’+2模式，第1句是主題句。結構上就不多說了，因為沒有什么問題。
　　語言方面：乍看之下沒有什么明顯的語法錯誤，但是仔細一分析，很多表達都可以改進一下，這就可能是更高一個檔次所以考慮的問題了！雖然看上去改了很多，但是6分依然可以保證，關鍵就是看是7分還是8分。但是，看了這一段，看來8分是不太可能了，呵呵。。。
　　On the other hand, overpopulation is also the cause of this problem. Especially in china（標點符號亂用，應該用逗號，然后小寫！！！）, although the growth of accommodation is rapid. It still can not meet the increasing needs of people（加個the可能更好些）. Furthermore, with the burgeoning of some industrial cities. People, attractive to(這里到底想表達什么意思呢？！是不是attracted by的意思啊？！) comparative advantages, such as education and job opportunities, have been swarming into these “dreamland of fantasy ”,which brings heavy burden to the limited housing resources. (68words)
　　語言分析：看正文段的語言水平一般就能看出作者真正的英語功底，看來這位老兄也就7分的命了，8分是肯定沒有了，呵呵。。。
　　Finally, we can not deniable（低級錯誤，can后面能加形容詞？！） the fact that government lack（單數名詞怎么可以加動詞原形呢？！） social awareness and consciousness of equilibrium between economic construction and utilization of land. the government of city without the planning of sustainable development for land（此句似乎沒有謂語動詞！！！）. The policies should be made to allow more skyscrapers to be built (47words)
　　語言分析：此段似乎作者有失水準！！！低級錯誤很多，導致影響很大！
　　In conclusion, actions to implement the improvement of housing problem should await the participation of government, big companies and factories and individuals.(22words)  (249words)
　　綜合評論：文章首段和尾段寫得還不錯。的確，從應試角度來說，這兩段是比較固定的，只要少犯些錯誤，一般不會有大問題！而正文段就不同了，由于靈活性相對來說比較大，內容也不特定，所以比較能反映作者的英語功底。已經有一定水平的同學，可以在正文段上再下些功夫！！！
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