實例講解托福寫作避免使用初期詞匯
涉及托福的時候,能夠有著清晰的邏輯固然很重要,但是詞匯對于整篇內容的準確表達也有著至關重要的作用。如果在文章中用慣普通的初級詞匯,那文章就顯得過于暗淡。如何避免初級詞匯在文章中過多的出現呢?現在就為大家來舉幾個例子。
1.Original: We know that sometimes success is measured by how much money you earn.
Revised: It does not surprise us to discover that sometimes success is measured in terms of the money you earn.
專家點評:know是非常初級的詞匯,作文中出現I believe that…,I know that…這樣的表達只能體現考生寫作技巧的稚嫩,用It does not surprise us to discover that…替換We know that…并沒有改變原句的含義,卻使全句頓時增添了亮點。
2.Original: We all know that most factories would be of no use if there were not clean water supply.
Revised: It goes without saying that most factories would be of no use if there were not clean water supply.
托福寫作專家點評:同上例一樣,know這樣的初級詞匯應避免在作文中使用,It goes without saying that…是一個固定結構,意思是“……是不言而喻的”,常在作文中用來引經據典或表明一個盡人皆知的道理,類似的表達還有:
An old saying goes that…
Proverb goes that…
It is universally acknowledged that…
It is generally accepted that…
3.Original: Some other people think that people should read extensively.
Revised: Another position says that people should read extensively.
專家點評:同know一樣,think也應該盡量避免使用,修改后的句子中是用Another position says that…代替think提出另一種觀點,也可以用hold a point of view,hold the opinion這樣的短語替換。
4.Original: The unexpected win of the match give us confidence.
Revised: The unexpected win of the match boost our confidence.
專家點評:give也屬于英語中最初級、最基本的詞匯,也是中國學生最喜歡在托福獨立寫作中應用的詞。這個詞只表示“給,給予”這個動作,不涉及動作的性質和狀態,若表示增添信心,增強士氣,比較地道的說法是用boost confidence/morale,如:The change of management has boosted morale throughout the company. 管理模式的改變使整個公司上下士氣倍受鼓舞。
5.Original: The use of drugs has increased greatly in the last ten years.
Revised: The use of drugs has increased significantly in the last ten years.
專家點評:greatly是一般用語,表示程度高,“很,非常”,使用相當普遍而沒有新意,在托福獨立寫作中應盡量避免使用這些通俗而又陳舊的詞匯,應換用一些更加正式,更有說服力的詞語,例如significantly表示達到了非常重要的或可觀的程度,“重大的,可觀的”,能夠具體說明藥品使用方面,增長幅度巨大。significantly還可以替換成considerably,tremendously等,同樣具有不錯的表達效果。
總之,在文章使用些有新意的用詞來替代那些通俗的詞匯,也是讓托福作文獲得高分的一種途徑。但是,前提是要對這些用詞有了充分的理解,冒然使用一些冷僻詞匯,不但文不對意,更是達不到預期效果。
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