范文:Traffic Jams in Shanghai
「要求」
要求：隨著社會經濟的發展，上海作為中國的大都市，其交通狀況不太令人滿意，如不及時有效的解決，則會成為制約其發展的“瓶頸”。請你根據你的了解，談一下關于上海交通阻塞的情況。
「范文」
Traffic Jams in Shanghai
For the past ten years traffic jams in Shanghai have become more and more serious. There are many reasons for it but in general they come down to three main causes.
First， with the rapid development of economy in Shanghai， too many traffic tools are brought into use. Next， the traffic system in Shanghai was established mainly in the 1940's. The roads are so narrow that they can't bear such heavy traffic. The final reason is that the population of Shanghai has been increasing too fast. So， it is clear that the traffic system in Shanghai must be reorganized as soon as possible.
「評語」
本段第一句為主題引入句，提出上海交通阻塞的嚴重性。第二句為主題句，指出阻塞有三個主要原因。然后明確闡述原因所在。最后，作者沒有作為一個客觀者總結其原因，而是對主題加以評述，表達自己的觀點，以引起讀者思考。
少以旁觀者的身份表達自己的觀點，要多用自己的聲音說話。
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