范文:Health, Beauty and Knowledge
「要求」
請以下面三句話分別作為三段段首的主題句，寫一篇以健康、美貌和學識為題的文章。
Young people look forward to being strong and handsome.
There are women who set great store by the beauty of outward appearance.
Health and beauty without knowledge is almost equal to a body without soul.
「范文」
Health， Beauty and Knowledge
Young people look forward to being strong and handsome. They take part in rigorous training to build up their body. They take some gymnastics stars as their models， whose welldeveloped muscles or proportioned figure is the combination of strength and grace， and also the indication of youthfulness and vitality.
There are women who set great store by the beauty of outward appearance. They dress themselves in clothes of the latest fashion. They apply a heavy make-up， rouging their lips， powdering their faces， painting their brows， and wearing earrings and necklaces. To compensate the inadequacy of their natural beauty， some goes so far as to receive the operation of face mending.
文體和文風也是應該注意的。文體比較鄭重。
Health and beauty without knowledge is almost equal to a body without soul. A person with a stout body alone can go nowhere in the modern age of science and technology， a person's outward beauty is as easy to fade as a flower to wither no matter how colorful it is. It is true that health and beauty are something one may well be proud of. But it is of greater importance for a student to master adequate knowledge that is useful in his life-long service to the country.
句子相應規整一些，用詞也盡量正式，以免出現不得當的笑話。
「評語」
全文圍繞三個主題句展開議論，條理清楚，層次分明，用詞準確?！皐ell-developed muscles”，“proportioned figure”，“apply make-up”，“rouging lips”，“powdering faces”，“painting brows”，及“wearing earrings and necklaces”等詞語搭配講究，生動地表達了作者的意思?！癮 person's outward beauty is as easy to fade as a flower to wither no matter how colorful it is.”比喻句用得貼切自然，很好地強調了主題。
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