初一英語作文:我父親很溫柔 My Father is a Gentleman（解析）
My father has small eyes,Wear a pair of glasses,looking more gently,the daddy's hair are not many, he said "the intelligent head does not grow hair"，daddy does the management, but daddy usually ever not talk bureaucratically to others, therefore his personal connection is specially good,is the same as me.daddy speaks always extremely temperately,never say hit the person,curse at people are also few,calculated scolded people not to be big, although sometimes also can be angry for a longtime,but just only about one day,could no surpass in one day-long.
He usually educate me that the person must to be honestly,friendly to other,and working diligently.
This is my father, I love him forever.
點評：
總體：這篇文章的第一段是一氣呵成的看，即一逗到底。這在英文當中是不可取的。寫該篇文章的考生是有一定的詞匯量的，因為文章出現了很多不錯的詞匯，但是文章的語法，則是完全錯誤的。如果這篇文章給外國人看，他們肯定是不知其所云。可以說這篇文章是完全將英文詞匯按照漢語的語序拼接而來的。
分評：
1)詞匯：小作者的詞匯量不錯，里面出現了很多高級的詞匯，例如，surpass(超過)、connection (連接，溝通)，temperately(暫時地)。這點對于小作者的作文是加分的。
2)語法：考生里面存在很多的語法錯誤，在這里列舉其中的最大的要害加以說明：一逗到底。英文和中文的語法是不一樣的。英文的主句里面只能出現一個動詞，若要出現多個單詞，則需要加連詞。例如"My father has small eyes,Wear a pair of glasses,looking more gently,"應該寫成：“My father has small eyes,and Wears a pair of glasses,looking more gently.”
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