英語四級5分作文修改1
In the present-day,immoral behavior in public is conventional.Last week,I went to park with my sister. Some tourists discard waste products into rivers for their convenience.No thing is more unethical than throw away trashs in rivers.
dust-begrimed rivers damage a park's image and scare away tourists. They have caused a great deal of environmental problems.What's more ,the junk from tourists contaminates rivers and thus contributes to fresh water shortages.We should try to minimize the effects and find some valid solutions to the problems.
whatever form garbage takes,we have to manage its disposal properly to protect our health and the environment.
作文批改如下:
In the present-day(刪除連字符),immoral behavior in public is conventional(用詞不當,conventional是傳統的意思,可改為common). Last week, I went to park with my sister. Some tourists discard(改為discarded)waste products into rivers for their convenience .No thing(改為Nothing) is more unethical than throw(改為throwing) away trashs(改為trashes) in rivers.
dust-begrimed(首字母大寫) rivers damage a park's image and scare away tourists. They have caused a great deal of (后面只能加不可數名詞)environmental problems. What's more, the junk from tourists contaminates rivers and thus contributes to fresh water shortages. We should try to minimize the effects and find some valid solutions to the problems.
whatever(首字母大寫) form garbage takes, we have to manage its disposal properly to protect our health and the environment. (提綱要求本段提出具體的解決方法) 同學你好,一定要按照題目要求來寫,第三段必須提出具體的解決辦法。另外,每段的開頭首字母要大寫。還要注意時態的一致。
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