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With the quickening of urban life and ever-increasing pressure,people in growing numbles are suffering some mental problems,one of which is that in the public where often have witnessed a emergence of people's immoral behaviors.One day,I saw a cheat deed to the consumer with my own eyes when I was shopping in the supermaket.
Considering above the uncivilized deeds,those given rise to many extremely worst effects.First and foremost, such bad actions may add to the sense of mistrust among people each other in our current society.In addition,we cannot effectively bulid harmony society.Last but not least,what we fail to understand is that politeness is one of conventional virtues of Chiese culture,we need to cultivate our common humanity.
To imporve this present situation,it is imperative for us to increase the awareness of people that this issue is of utter significance to us.For one thing,we should appeal to our govoronments to enact strict regulations to control the problem.For annther,it is necessary to fully arouse the masses' initiative to crack this hard cut.Only in these ways can we make our society more civilized and colorful and have a briliant future.
作文批改如下：
With the quickening of urban life and ever-increasing pressure, people in growing numbles（拼寫錯誤，改為numbers） are suffering some mental problems, one of which is that in the public where often have witnessed a emergence of people's immoral behaviors. （mental problem 是指人的心理問題，，這和在公眾場合看到不道德行為無關，此外，本句語法有嚴重錯誤。）One day, I saw a cheat deed to（a salesman cheat）the consumer with my own eyes when I was shopping in the supermaket（拼寫錯誤，改為supermarket）.
Considering above the uncivilized deeds, those given rise to many extremely worst effects. First and foremost, such bad actions may add to the sense of mistrust among people each other（刪除）in our current society. In addition, we cannot effectively bulid（拼寫錯誤，build）（加a）harmony(改為形容詞harmonious) society. Last but not least, what we fail to understand is that politeness is one of conventional virtues of Chiese(拼寫錯誤，Chinese) culture ,we need to cultivate our common humanity(用詞不當).(Last but not least 后面也應該是影響)
To imporve（拼寫錯誤，改為improve） this present situation ,it is imperative for us to increase the awareness of people (加句號)that（改為Because）this issue is of utter significance to us. For one thing, we should appeal to our govoronments(改為government) to enact strict regulations to control the problem. For annther(拼寫錯誤，改為another),it is necessary to fully arouse the masses' initiative to crack this hard cut. Only in these ways can we make our society more civilized and colorful(加逗號) and （we will）have a briliant (拼寫錯誤，改為brilliant)future.
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