高考英語優秀作文賞析：2008年上海卷
滿分作文：
Xiao Hong, our monitor and one of my good friends, got a cold last Monday and has been in hospital for three days. We suggested seeing her to show our concern. So yesterday we went to the hospital. Since I have known for long that Xiao Hong is fond of doggy, I bought a very cute doggy toy before going there.
On seeing the toy, Xiao Hong couldnt help screaming. She hugged the toy which was so lovely and cute again and again. She was moved because we all came to see her. We expressed our hope that she could recover as soon as possible. I told her that the doggy represented my hope of her recovering and my cherishing of our friendship. I believe she will be well soon and come back to us again!
名師點評：
本文的寫作讓我們再一次領略到上海作文的水平。我覺得其優勢主要體現在，其一，用詞準確生動，即通過有難度的詞匯的使用，將作者的意思準確地加以表達；其二，句式的變換和語法的應用，即表達的問題。上述二者兼而有之，分數怎能不高？
積累卡片：
好詞：1. concern n.關心2. screaming a.尖叫的3.hug v.擁抱4.cherish v.珍愛
好句：1. We suggested seeing her to show our concern. 我們建議去看看她以表示我們對她的關心。
好處：suggest doing，建議做什么。
2. I told her that the doggy represented my hope of her recovering and my cherishing of our friendship. 我告訴她這個小狗代表了我希望她康復的愿望和對于我們友誼的珍愛。
好處：意思表達十分準確。
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