高考英語優秀作文賞析:2008年天津卷1
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How to Protect Our Eyesight
As we can see in the picture, nowadays most students wear glasses because they are shortsighted due to high study pressure. With the help of glasses, they can see the blackboard clearly.
This phenomenon must be paid attention to. We should reduce the time of reading and when we read, do read in the bright place so as to protect our eyes. Besides, the eye exercises are another way to keep eyes healthy. After school, wed better get more sleep so that the eyes can get more rest.
As the saying goes, eyes are the window of our hearts. If you can follow the methods mentioned above, you can surely have a good eyesight.
名師點評:本文采用三段論的方式,分析圖畫,提出建議,提出希望,敘述比較詳細。文中用了兩個伴隨狀語,使得文章非常連貫。這個獨立結構也很好。此外,作者還是用了比較復雜的句子,We should reduce the...采用復合結構,講出了多個保護視力的要點。
積累卡片:好詞:1. phenomenon n.現象2. so as to 以便
好句:1. With the help of glasses, they can see the blackboard clearly. 在眼鏡的輔助之下,他們才能將黑板看得更清楚。
好處:with引導狀語表示伴隨。
2. As the saying goes, eyes are the window of our hearts. 眾所周知的是,眼睛是心靈的窗戶。
好處:諺語的使用增光添彩。
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