手把手教你提高雅思寫(xiě)作分?jǐn)?shù)
基礎(chǔ)差的同學(xué)(目前只有5分或者更低)永遠(yuǎn)是注意語(yǔ)法和表達(dá),如果你的目標(biāo)是6分(特別是你只有一個(gè)月的時(shí)間)。不建議目標(biāo)考7分,很多雅思作文老師教書(shū)那么多年,都未必考7分。
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先說(shuō)語(yǔ)法:
只要你的一段話,出現(xiàn)4種錯(cuò)誤(1.謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞 2.句子結(jié)構(gòu)殘缺 3.詞性錯(cuò)誤 4.名詞單復(fù)數(shù)和不可數(shù)名詞寫(xiě)復(fù)數(shù))超過(guò)2次,基本上就是5.5分封頂,一考一個(gè)準(zhǔn)。
大家可以看看這個(gè)學(xué)生的段落,作文題目是關(guān)于人們要不要做temporary jobs。
On the other hand, people just work for a short time, which means they cannot accumulate experience and acquire some skills. They will not succeed as they cannot gain the accept from their boss. People just doing some simple work means that they do not have much more responsibility. For example, although someone has worked for many different restaurants, he still do not understand how to manage a restaurant. A normal clerk never be a manager if he always changes his workplace.
第三句話出現(xiàn)了句子people doing simple work 充當(dāng)句子主語(yǔ)的語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤。然后后面出現(xiàn)了he do主謂不一致,never be a manager,謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞不完整的錯(cuò)誤
看完這一段,我可以知道這個(gè)學(xué)生最高就是5.5分的水平。
備考建議:
1. 這些學(xué)生建議剛開(kāi)始不要忙著寫(xiě)作文,寫(xiě)也是錯(cuò)的;
2.踏實(shí)花1個(gè)星期學(xué)習(xí)語(yǔ)法,通過(guò)100句翻譯提升句子結(jié)構(gòu)的例子,通過(guò)我的教學(xué)材料《語(yǔ)法知識(shí)》的改錯(cuò)題來(lái)提升句子改錯(cuò)能力。
只有你減少了語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤,寫(xiě)作文才是6分。
再說(shuō)表達(dá):
表達(dá)就是要用詞伙,不要用中國(guó)式表達(dá)和翻譯。
我們看下面這個(gè)學(xué)生的段落:
Some people tend to take temporary jobs because they can gain an increasing number of time to cultivate their interests which can improve people's talent and potential. It is helpful for personal development.They may be unfamiliar with their talents,abilities and career plans when they commence with the works.For example, some people attend the electronic business courses,so they may find that they have the abilities to run a business.Therefor,they may earn a large number of money and gain more achievements.
這個(gè)學(xué)生的語(yǔ)法沒(méi)有太大問(wèn)題,句子結(jié)構(gòu)基本準(zhǔn)確,但是他的分?jǐn)?shù)最高就是6分,因?yàn)樗泻芏啾容^中式的表達(dá):
an increasing number of time 應(yīng)該是gain more time
improve talents 應(yīng)該是develop talents
career plans 應(yīng)該是career path, or career trajectory
commence with works 應(yīng)該是enter the workforce, or launch their career
gain achievements應(yīng)該是achieve greater success
這些文章在中國(guó)人眼里看,問(wèn)題不大,畢竟我們將他的單詞翻譯成中文,也能看懂,但是問(wèn)題是考官是外國(guó)人,沒(méi)有中文的背景,就很難理解。
備考建議:
可以選擇我的兩本書(shū)《手把手教你雅思寫(xiě)作》和《手把手教你雅思詞伙》來(lái)積累基本的詞伙,地道表達(dá),也可以看一下外國(guó)人寫(xiě)的文章,譬如說(shuō)前考官Simon的博客,還有BBC,Economist 等文章。
拿到了6分就要看拓展了:
中國(guó)學(xué)生拓展的常見(jiàn)問(wèn)題有:
1.跳躍
2.陳詞濫調(diào),泛泛而談
3.重復(fù)
4.邏輯不好
我們看下面這個(gè)學(xué)生的段落, 文章的題目是關(guān)于小孩是不是應(yīng)該在家里和學(xué)校經(jīng)常看電視。
In my view, children can watch TV with the guidance of teachers or parents. they are less likely to show self discipline and long screen time may lead to poor eyesight, which can affect their academic performance. if they are required to watch some documentaries, the knowledge they acquire from television can supplement what they learn at school. as a result, they even can apply their knowledge to practice.
這個(gè)同學(xué)最大的問(wèn)題就是:
1. 邏輯不好有跳躍
2. 第二句話說(shuō)的是小孩不自律,看電視影響視力,最后學(xué)習(xí)不好
3. 但是第三句突然說(shuō)到了如果看記錄片,可以增加知識(shí),不僅兩個(gè)句子沒(méi)有任何聯(lián)系,而且是一褒一貶,讀起來(lái)就很沒(méi)有邏輯
4. 最后一個(gè)句子,說(shuō)“學(xué)生可以學(xué)以致用”,出現(xiàn)了跳躍,為什么看個(gè)紀(jì)錄片就可以學(xué)以致用?難道看個(gè)武打片你就成為武林高手?
備考建議:
寫(xiě)文章前可以先寫(xiě)中文思路,再寫(xiě)英文。因?yàn)橹形氖悄刚Z(yǔ),一目了然,你更能看出自己思維的跳躍和邏輯問(wèn)題。英文是第二語(yǔ)言,有些時(shí)候你看自己的文章,覺(jué)得字?jǐn)?shù)夠了就好了,根本顧不上想邏輯。或者是發(fā)現(xiàn)自己邏輯有問(wèn)題,也沒(méi)有單詞去表達(dá)自己的想法。
只有解決了拓展的問(wèn)題,你才可以獲得雅思作文7分。
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