考研英語看圖作文范例點(diǎn)評：老外過春節(jié) Foreigners over the Spring Festival
看圖作文在英語作文中是大家普遍缺乏練習(xí)的一種類型，一個(gè)提高的方式就是看范例和點(diǎn)評，針對其中的錯(cuò)誤進(jìn)行自我修正。
老外過春節(jié):
寫作原文
(文章直接描述圖畫內(nèi)容，不妥，可加一句圖畫類作文的開頭常用句，如As is vividly depicted in the picture,等)The black man, with a happy and delighted face(改為with afacial expression of happiness), is spending spring festival with a Chinese family. Conspicuously, it is a (改為an)encouraging scene relate to culture integration between China and west(可改為the west countries), which is a(改為an) excellent offspring of new century. Several factor(改為factors，several意為“幾個(gè)”，其后名詞應(yīng)用復(fù)數(shù)形式) weight heavily for this emerging trend illustrate(改為illustrated) in the picture, yet, two kernels suspended on the top of the list which should never be overlooked. To begin with, the Chinese economy has witnessed its unprecedented lever(改為level,unprecedented level表示“前所未有的水平”) of growth in past 30 years, which give an powerful impetus to the publicity of Chinese civilization. What's more, Chinese culture, though through perpetual wars and turbulence, preserve its vitality and glamour(改為its vitality and glamour are preserved), (加and its) assets appreciated by most foreigners. There are encouraging parallels today, as many westerners in one wave after another making their trip(改為trips) to China to get panorama of Chinese heritage. From my perspective, various measures should be made to foster this integration. Firstly, suitable atmosphere must be created, where our culture and its counterparts can co-exist in harmonious.,(注意標(biāo)點(diǎn)的正確使用)by us. Secondly, the authorities ought to lunch various publicity campaigns to make Chinese culture known to(加the) world. The cultural thrive has loomed, and the economic prosperity will not be far away.
總體點(diǎn)評
整體來說，文章寫得不錯(cuò);但還存在個(gè)別簡單的語法錯(cuò)誤。作者在寫作完之后若可以花費(fèi)幾分鐘時(shí)間來回讀文章，便會(huì)減少不必要的錯(cuò)誤。考研作文的整體思路你已經(jīng)基本掌握，后面要做的就是多積累高分佳句，為自己的文章增彩;再者，寫完之后一定要認(rèn)真檢查，減少失分點(diǎn)。
參考分?jǐn)?shù)(滿分20分)：13
英語寫作水平的提升需要不斷地練習(xí)，在改正錯(cuò)誤中不斷取得進(jìn)步，不怕犯錯(cuò)誤，怕明知道犯錯(cuò)誤卻不面對。看了范文和點(diǎn)評，希望大家有思考，有提高。
節(jié)日Festival 新年New year
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