【備考誤區】托福寫作的十大最差開頭方式
最減分托福寫作開頭之一：廢話連篇不知所云
典型失敗案例： Topic 1-Should college students be allowed to get married?This topic is very interesting. I’m very interested in talking about this topic. Because I’m also a college student and I’m not married……
修改方案：開門見山 直奔主題
In my opinion, it would not be a wise decision to allow college students to get married.
Topic 2-Will modern technology, such as the Internet, ever replace the book or the writing word as the sole source of information?
Ok, this topic is a very good topic. First, let me tell you a story: I have a friend, he likes go on the internet very much. Every day, he uses internet to read news or play internet games. So we can see the internet is more and more important in our daily life.
Topic 3-The importance of environmental protection
Oh, this topic is surely very important. Isn’t it? Of course! It’s really very very important!
最減分托福寫作開頭之二：中式英文 人見人暈(噴血指數：☆☆☆☆☆)
典型失敗案例：Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life
In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily……
Topic 2- The population problem
The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city centers of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there.
Topic3- Is there fairness in today’s business world?
I think in today’s society, there is no fairness in the business world. For example, I always chopped when I go out buy things……
Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person
Being a nice person have many advantage. I believe if a people always do bad things, he will get “baoying”.
最減分托福寫作開頭之三：觀點模糊 態度曖昧(噴血指數：☆☆☆)
典型失敗案例： Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?
I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little, only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me……
最減分托福寫作開頭之四：偏離主題 無軌電車(噴血指數：☆☆☆☆)
典型失敗案例：Topic-It is said that nowadays one can not acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?
I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English, music tools, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places.
最減分托福寫作開頭之五：語法錯誤 慘不忍睹(噴血指數：☆☆☆)
典型失敗案例：Topic-If children behave badly, should their parents accept responsibility and also be punished?
About this problem, my think is if children behave badly, then parents are not right. Because teach child is parent’s responsibility. So we also punish parents too besides children is also should.
最減分托福寫作開頭之六：過分簡單 沒有重點(噴血指數：☆☆)
典型失敗案例：Topic-The importance of environmental protection
This issue is surely very important, let’s talk about it!
最減分托福寫作開頭之七：用詞不當 表達不準 (噴血指數：☆☆)
典型失敗案例：Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?
I think college students should not be allowed to get married because they are very young and so we can’t take the responsibility to form a family.
最減分托福寫作開頭之八：意思重復 原地踏步(噴血指數：☆☆☆)
典型失敗案例：Topic-Your opinion on DINK families
My opinion on DINK families is that DINK families is not a good thing. And it is a bad thing. It brings no benefits to our society and it is even sometimes harmful to our society.
最減分托福寫作開頭之九：中國俗語 胡亂翻譯(噴血指數：☆☆☆☆☆)
典型失敗案例：Topic 1-Is it good to have a large family?
I think it is good to have a large family. Because we Chinese believe a sentence: “Many sons, many lucks”……
正確說法：Happiness lies in having many children
Topic 2 -Should we pretend to know everything or admit our ignorance?
We all know, our Chinese old fathers and grandfathers said: “Know is know, don’t know is don’t know”……
Topic 3- Do you think one’s character is greatly influenced by his/her family?
Chinese old words says very good: Dragon born dragon, phoenix born phoenix, rat’s son can make hole……
Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person
I believe one sentence:“A good person is all life safe”. We Chinese people always say: “Good has good pay, bad has bad pay”.
最減分托福寫作開頭之十： 觀點武斷 態度強硬 (噴血指數：☆☆☆)
典型失敗案例：Topic1-The importance of confidence
In my opinion, confidence is the most important thing for a person. All the successful people in the world are full of confidence. While those people who don’t have confidence, they all have failed.
Topic 2 - The solution to the traffic problem
I think to solve the traffic problem, very easy! For those who don’t obey the traffic rules, we should put all of them into prison. If we do that, I’m sure there will be no traffic problem any more.
總之，大家可以根據舉例看一下自己是不是也犯過上面的毛病。如果開頭開不好，也建議大家使用一些格言或者俚語來為托福寫作開一個完美的頭。
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