【實例分析】提分托福獨立寫作 避免4種開頭方式
想要寫出一篇托福的高分作文,最為重要的當然是一個精彩的文章開頭。對于托福作文來說,很多初入托福的學(xué)生認為是不是需要引入一些比較高深的名人名言,才是博得高分的基礎(chǔ)。其實,事實也并非如此,在托福開頭中,開門見山直奔主題才是關(guān)鍵。下面我們就為大家介紹一下,托福寫作開頭中應(yīng)該避免的四項關(guān)鍵問題。
1、廢話連篇急煞讀者
失敗案例:
Topic --Should college students be allowed to get married?
This topic is very interesting. I am very interested in talking about this topic. Because I am also a college student and I am not married……
修改方案:開門見山 直奔主題
In my opinion, it would not be a wise decision to allow college students to get married。
2、觀點不明態(tài)度曖昧
失敗案例:
Topic--Should college students be allowed to get married?
I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little, only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me……
3、漸行漸遠 離題千里
失敗案例:
Topic---It is said that nowadays one can not acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?
I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English, music, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places。
4、中式英語人見人跪
失敗案例:
Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life
In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily……
Topic 2- The population problem
The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city centers of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there。
Topic3- Is there fairness in today’s business world?
I think in today’s society, there is no fairness in the business world. For example, I always chop when I go out buy things……
Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person
Being a nice person have many advantage. I believe if a person always does bad things, he will get “baoying”。
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