【托福寫作】怎樣展開自己的文字敘述？學會內容的細化
在托福寫作過程中，文章的段落結構和立意等等當然是非常重要的，但是作為一種語言考試，想要取得高分，就要學會在文章的語言表達中，展示自己的文字功底。那么，怎樣展示自己的文字功底才是最為合理的呢?
Aeroplanes have the reputation of being dangerous and even hardened travelers are intimidated by them. They also have the disadvantage of being an expensive form of transport. But nothing can match them for speed and comfort. 段落的開頭使用讓步加轉折的邏輯關系引出了段落的主題：飛機旅行的有點—速度快、舒適。
這也預示了段落內部的層次。 Travelling at a height of 30,000 feet, far above the clouds, and at over 500 miles an hour is an exhilarating experience. You do not have to devise ways of taking your mind off the journey, for an aeroplane gets you to your destination rapidly. 論述飛機速度的過程中：替代籠統表達高和快，作者直接寫出了飛機飛行的具體高度(30，000 feet)和具體時速(500 miles/hr)。充分體現出英文說理文章對細節的要求，因為只有細節才更具有真實性和說服力。而這一點往往是中國學生比較欠缺的。
緊接著開始展開段落的下一個層次：飛機的舒適度。而讓我們以外的是從引入第二個層次到最后的全部展開‘comfortable’這個字樣竟然從未出現過，那么取而代之讓讀者切身感受到這種舒適度不是別的正是細節的描寫，這也是該段最最精彩的部分。For a few hours, you settle back in a deep armchair to enjoy the flight. The real escapist can watch a film and sip champagne on some services. Settle back in a deep armchair 和sip champagne 足以讓讀者身臨其仿佛自己正懶懶地窩在座椅里舌尖流過美味的香檳酒。
But even when such refinements are not available, there is plenty to keep you occupied. An aeroplane offers you an unusual and breathtaking view of the world. You soar effortlessly over high mountains and deep valleys. You really see the shape of the land. If the landscape is hidden from view, you can enjoy the extraordinary sight of unbroken cloud plain that stretch out for miles before you, while the sun shines brilliantly in a clear sky…層層讓步的邏輯讓讀者覺得似乎無論怎樣，飛機總會給我們準備一份大禮。而對于機艙外面的景色描寫之細致自然而然的在讀者眼前展開了一副美妙的畫卷。就這樣，在沒有一句的話直接告訴我們飛機的舒適感的情況下，作者就是用細致的文字描寫帶著每個讀者舒舒服服的做了一回‘頭等艙’。
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