托福寫作語料庫之聰明朋友比幽默朋友更重要
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托福獨(dú)立寫作思路及語料庫之聰明朋友比幽默朋友更重要,英文題目The friends that you can have fun with are more important than the friends that you can get help from?
友誼類:
The friends that you can have fun with are more important than the friends that you can get help from? 你喜歡交可以給你帶來快樂的朋友還是可以幫助你的朋友?
主題觀點(diǎn):對比可以帶來歡樂的朋友,我喜歡結(jié)交可以患難與共的朋友。
布局圖:
首段:背景介紹 + 爭議焦點(diǎn)+作家立場
二段:第一個(gè)論據(jù)的展開:細(xì)節(jié)支持 + 數(shù)據(jù)的支持
三段:第二個(gè)論據(jù)的展開:講故事(我自己的故事;我同學(xué)的故事:叔叔的故事)
四段:讓步段:幽默的朋友也有利好
尾段:再次亮明觀點(diǎn) + 總結(jié)理由
原創(chuàng)語料庫:
1. A close and congenial friend is what every individual aspires after. 擁有親密無間的和志同道合的朋友是人人都渴望的。
點(diǎn)評:…… is what every individual aspires after …… 是人人渴望的
點(diǎn)評:congenial friends = like-minded friends n志同道合的朋友
2. A day without friendship is like a day without sunshine. 沒有友誼的生活就像是沒有陽光的生活。
點(diǎn)評:個(gè)性開篇,談及友誼對于生活的意義。
3. a trustworthy friend n 值得信賴的朋友
點(diǎn)評:trustworthy = reliable adj 可以信賴的
4. Those who can go through thick and thin together with you 那些可以和你風(fēng)雨同舟的人(作家文采)
5. a shoulder to cry on n可以提供慰藉的人
點(diǎn)評:該短語是口語用法,比較地道,寫作中可使用一次,體現(xiàn)表達(dá)的豐富。
6. a humorous friend = a friend with great sense of humor n 一個(gè)幽默的朋友
7. enjoy wonderful time together = have fun together v一起享受歡樂時(shí)光
8. sincere friends n真誠的朋友
9. intimate friends n親密的朋友
10. bosom friends n密友;知己
11. Prosperity helps us make friends, however,adversity helps us try them. 富貴易交友,患難見真情。(作家觀點(diǎn))
點(diǎn)評:try sb v考驗(yàn)?zāi)橙?/p>
12. A friend in need is a friend in deed 患難見真情
點(diǎn)評:in need adv在危難中
點(diǎn)評:in deed adv 真正地
13. The most essential standard to judge a true friend is whether he or she will provide us with timely support in time of plight. 判斷好友的最重要的標(biāo)準(zhǔn)就是,是否他或她愿意在逆境中給我們提供及時(shí)的幫助(觀點(diǎn)總結(jié))
14. Whenever I run into unexpected adverse circumstances, it is Sandy that provides me with emotional support and spiritual consolation. 無論何時(shí)我遇到意想不到的困境,Sandy 總是可以給我提供情感支持和精神安慰。(例證支持)
15. I believe true friend can surpass the age limitation. I always take my father as my trustworthy friend from whom I really benefit a great deal. 我相信好友是超越年齡的限制,我一直認(rèn)為爸爸是值得信賴的朋友,從他身上我獲益良多。(細(xì)節(jié)展開)
點(diǎn)評:重視自我情感的自由寫作
16. This debate reminds me of the experience of striving for attending my dream graduate school. After failing the exam for two times, I thought of giving up halfway, however, my father provided me with an ocean of assistance both financially and spiritually. 話題使我聯(lián)想起我為考研奮斗的經(jīng)歷,兩次嘗試失敗過后,我曾經(jīng)想過放棄,但是,我的爸爸給我提供了經(jīng)濟(jì)和精神方面的巨大的支持。(細(xì)節(jié)展開)
點(diǎn)評:重視自我情感的自由寫作,更加容易文思泉涌,更加容易打動考官,因?yàn)槲覀兿雀袆恿俗约骸?/p>
17. Instead of curling into a ball beneath the table, I ended up mustering up my courage, learning from my failure and marching courageously towards the next opportunity. 我沒有蜷縮成球,藏在桌下, 相反,我最終鼓起勇氣, 從失敗中學(xué)習(xí),為爭取下次機(jī)會努力前行(作家文采)
點(diǎn)評:curl into a ball beneath the table 蜷縮成球,藏在桌下(比喻用法)
點(diǎn)評:end up doing sth v 最終以 …… 為結(jié)局(精彩表達(dá))
點(diǎn)評:muster up one’s courage to do sth 鼓起勇氣做 …… (推薦背誦)
點(diǎn)評:march courageously towards ……v 向著 …… 勇敢前行
18. A humorous friend can never fail to help us to see the sunny side, especially when we feel frustrated and depressed. 幽默的朋友可以幫助我們看到積極的一面,尤其是當(dāng)我們感到沮喪和挫敗的時(shí)候。
點(diǎn)評:never fail to = always adv 一直……
點(diǎn)評:第一人稱寫法更加有說服力
19. A humorous friend can, to large extent, help us remain cheerful in time of adversity. 富有幽默感的朋友,可以在很大程度上幫助我們在逆境中保持樂觀情緒。
點(diǎn)評:remain cheerful = see the sunny side = be optimistic about …… v 保持樂觀
20. Opting for friends who are willing to give unselfish help outshines choosing friends with whom we can feel the sense of humor. 選擇愿意慷慨相助的朋友勝過了選擇可以給讓我們帶來幽默的朋友.
點(diǎn)評:核心觀點(diǎn)句:主題句亮劍或者尾段總結(jié)作家立場。
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