上海中考英語作文范文二
范文2及點評：
I want to invent a time machine
If I have the ability to invent something that could make life better, the first thing that comes into my mind is a time machine. With its help, people could go back to the past conveniently.
We unavoidably make some mistakes that we regret so much, it’s fantastic if we could get another chance to fix it. Besides, it is of great importance to the aged people if they are able toenjoy their youth for a second time.
Although it sounds like an impossible dream to realize, I still believe with the rapid development of science and technology, my idea will become reality some day.
精彩亮點分析：
亮點一：the first thing that comes into mind 首先映入腦海的是。
亮點二：conveniently方便地，便利地。
亮點三：be of great importance名詞結構更高端。
亮點四：使用be able to短語替換掉could，避免重復。
亮點五：with the rapid development of science and technology隨著科學和技術的迅速發展。
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