高考英語優秀作文賞析：2008年全國卷Ⅱ
滿分作文1：
Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!
Baishan Mountain Hotel is now open for business.
500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, it provides singleperson room, of which the price is RMB100 yuan per day and the number is 20, and 15 doubleperson rooms, with a price of RMB 150 yuan per day. It also provides hot water bath service. You can enjoy both Chinese and western food in the restaurant and drink coffee and tea in the cafe. The swimming pool is open for free the whole day. All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable. So come to enjoy yourself!
Welcome to book rooms in Baishan Mountain.
名師點評：
本文開門見山，首先點明了主旨。本文最大的特點是應用了很多比較復雜的句式，使文章比較出彩。開頭使用了獨立結構交代賓館位置。which引導的非限制性定語從句的使用也很正確?？偟貋碚f，文章句式精煉，是篇不錯的滿分作文。
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好詞：1. provide v.提供2. convenience n.便利
好句：All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable.所有這些服務都會給你帶來便利，并且非常的愉快。
好處：bring great convenience 帶來便利
滿分作文2：
Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!
Baishan Mountain Hotel is now open for business.
The hotel is located 500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, a very convenient position to go sightseeing in the Baishan Mountain. There are two kinds of rooms for service: singleperson room, 20 in total and RMB 100 yuan per day and doubleperson room, 15 in total and RMB 150 yuan per day. The hot water bath is provided as well. We serve both Chinses and western food in the restaurant as well as coffee and tea in the cafe. All are provided in a short time. The swimming pool, which is open for the whole day, is free for you to come.
We accept booking rooms ahead of time. So come and enjoy!
名師點評：
本文敘述比較詳細，使用了比較復雜的句式和短語。首句的伴隨狀語用得很好。在介紹房間類型時，作者使用了簡短的對比句式，很精煉。作者還使用了定語從句which，同時在描述酒店的兩種價格的時候也很恰當，語句生動而不重復。
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好詞:1. sightseeing n.觀光旅游2. book v.登記；預訂
好句:1. The hotel is located 500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, a very convenient position to go sightseeing in the Baishan Mountain. 賓館在距離白山入口處500米的地方，這對于參觀白山來說是一個很方便的位置。
好處：伴隨狀語的使用很到位。
2. The swimming pool, which is open for the whole day, is free for you to come. 游泳池全天免費開放。
好處：which引導了非限制性定語從句。
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