對于雅思寫作來說，范文是好東西，因為大部分人沒有那種幸運，可以有一位老師從旁指點自己作文的不足，這個時候，一篇不會說法的好質量范文，就是一位沉默如金的好老師。所以，網絡上不缺乏范文求分享的人，也不缺分享各種來路不明的范文的人。如何讓9分的范文給你9分的啟迪，7分的范文給你7分的助益?

怎么來學習一篇9分范文?如何最大化地利用它?來自native speaker + IELTS examiner Simon的范文一篇，先閱讀，再評鑒.

雅思題目：

More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone?

前考官9分范文：

Cities are often seen as places of opportunity, but there are also some major drawbacks of living in a large metropolis. In my opinion, governments could do much more to improve city life for the average inhabitant.

The main problem for anyone who hopes to migrate to a large city is that the cost of living is likely to be much higher than it is in a small town or village. Inhabitants of cities have to pay higher prices for housing, transport, and even food. Another issue is that urban areas tend to suffer from social problems such as high crime and poverty rates in comparison with rural areas. Furthermore, the air quality in cities is often poor, due to pollution from traffic, and the streets and public transport systems are usually overcrowded. As a result, city life can be unhealthy and stressful.

However, there are various steps that governments could take to tackle these problems. Firstly, they could invest money in the building of affordable or social housing to reduce the cost of living. Secondly, politicians have the power to ban vehicles from city centres and promote the use of cleaner public transport, which would help to reduce both air pollution and traffic congestion. In London, for example, the introduction of a congestion charge for drivers has helped to curb the traffic problem. A third option would be to develop provincial towns and rural areas, by moving industry and jobs to those regions, in order to reduce the pressure on major cities.

In conclusion, governments could certainly implement a range of measures to enhance the quality of life for all city residents.(273 words, band 9)

雅思9分范文評析：

本題是一道多問題類型話題，①需要考生解析居住城市所遇見的困難，②以及給出政府所能做出的改善建議。

Cities are often seen as places of opportunity(a better life), but there are also some major drawbacks(extremely difficult/difficulties) of living in a large metropolis(a city). In my opinion, governments could do much more to improve city life(make urban life better) for the average inhabitant(everyone).

首段：改寫題目+自己想法。括號中為原文題目。

注意：Simon考官偏愛兩句首段方式，簡潔明了。

句式：被動句+there be句型

The main problem for anyone (who hopes to migrate to a large city) is that the cost of living is likely to be much higher than it is in a small town or village. Inhabitants of cities have to pay higher prices for housing, transport, and even food. Another issue is that urban areas tend to suffer from social problems such as high crime and poverty rates in comparison with rural areas. Furthermore, the air quality in cities is often poor, due to pollution from traffic, and the streets and public transport systems are usually overcrowded. As a result, city life can be unhealthy and stressful.

第二段，共五句：

①+②：生活成本高+細節拓展(舉例：住房、交通、食物)——使用比較：be much higher, pay higher prices

③：社會問題多(舉例：犯罪、貧窮)——使用比較：in comparison

④：空氣污染重(源于交通問題，然后順帶提到交通擁擠)

⑤：簡單總結

句式：定語從句+表語從句

However, there are various steps (that governments could take) to tackle these problems. Firstly, they could invest money in the building of affordable or social housing to reduce the cost of living. Secondly, politicians have the power to ban vehicles from city centres and promote the use of cleaner public transport, which would help to reduce both air pollution and traffic congestion. In London, for example, the introduction of a congestion charge for drivers has helped to curb the traffic problem. A third option would be to develop provincial towns and rural areas, by moving industry and jobs to those regions, in order to reduce the pressure on major cities.

第三段，共五句：

①：簡單總起

②：方案一，降低生活成本——投資廉價房源

③+④：方案二，減少空氣污染、減輕交通壓力——限制汽車使用，使用清潔型新汽車。舉例——倫敦擁堵費

⑤：方案三，減輕交通壓力——從市中心外移工業企業

句式：there be+定語從句+非限制性定語從句

In conclusion, governments could certainly implement a range of measures to enhance the quality(make urban life better) of life for all city residents(everyone).

結尾一句，再次申明觀點，改寫原文，或者改寫首段第二句觀點皆可。

全文總結：

全文共運用：被動句+表語從句+非限制定語從句+2句there be句+2句定語從句

large cities —— a large metropolis —— urban areas —— major cities

a better life —— places of opportunity

difficulties —— major drawbacks

do much more —— tackle these problems —— implement a range of measures

improve city life —— enhance the quality of life

everyone —— average inhabitant —— all city residents

rural areas —— a small town or village —— provincial towns —— regions

public transport —— vehicle —— traffic

public transport systems are usually overcrowded —— congestion

注意：同義替換并不代表意思相同，只要類似即可。

最后是來自Simon考官的友情提示：不要在連接詞上費太多心思，用first of all替代first絕非文章的亮點所在!

所以，從詞匯句子角度，可讀；從行文框架思路角度，可讀；從論證方法角度，可讀，一魚三吃，說的即是如此雅思好文。

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