雅思寫作如何論證?大作文不是講道理
在雅思寫作考試中,大作文考的是議論文,就是考察考生是否能夠在相對較短的時間內搜集論據,具體地論證自己的觀點。另外,雅思寫作大作文的話題范圍非常廣泛,大到政府社會、經濟、科技,小到工作、教育等話題都會考到。這對于長期只接受國內應試教育的考生來說,是有一定的困難,很多時候只看個題目都會覺得無從下筆,因而很多中國考生的論文空洞,缺乏說服力,那么雅思寫作應該如何論證呢?
很多中國考生在應對雅思作文時喜歡通過講道理來說明問題,但話題中并不是所有題目和內容都可以通過道理來說服他人的,比如關于“anti-social behavior”, 屬于道德范疇的話題,是很難用道理來講清楚的。所以,建議考生在備考時需要加強論據論證的能力,使其能夠很好地支持自己的觀點。
先來看下小站名師的一篇關于“anti-social behavior"的范文,大家可以借鑒下他的觀點提出和地道的表達
Task 2 題目:Today there is a great increase in anti-social behaviors and lack of respect to others. What are the causes of this? Who should take responsibility for dealing with it? (選自 2011 年 01 月 22 日雅思寫作機經)
Write at least 250 words
小站雅思頻道B 老師范文:
With the development of modern society, there seems to be an irresistible uprising momentum of anti-social behaviors and lacking in respect between people. Various causes may lead to this increasingly prevailing phenomenon. From my personal perspectives, I tend to attribute this tendency to the morbid social conduct, the gap between the rich and the poor and the fiasco of school education.
開頭叁排比提出自己的觀點:病態的社會風氣、貧富差距、學校教育的失敗是原因,定義為五段論的基調,堅持五段論是高分作文最起碼的結構!!!
The surroundings somewhat influence the behaviors of people due to the conformity mentality among us. A healthy social conduct will guide people, on the contrary, an unhealthy society can destroy the very good nature of people. Take an example of the terrorist attack in Norway 2011, which caused 77 innocent civilians’ lives. If there were a more harmonious social conduct to give more sense of belonging to that pervert killer, the tragedy could be prevented.
無比貼切的例子的使用,挪威變態殺手的恐怖襲擊,完全西方化的思維。
The widening gap between the wealthy and the poor also triggered the psychology of hatred of those so-called “borderline men”. The enlarging social stratification and the growing income gap between the white-collars and manual workers stir the mental imbalance as well as the call on unfairness among the people with humble birth. Spontaneously, the rich became more and more disrespectful to the poor which eventually awakened the wrath of them.
關鍵詞乃“社會邊緣人”,圍繞這個中心詞展開,究其塬因乃貧富差距之大之可憎!!!
The school education is the last to be condemned. Were there more skillful and patient guidance of how to cultivate a complete and sound personality, to some extent, there won’t be that many extremists and borderline people .The formation of individual’s property and character molded during juvenile years, especially, adolescence, which, if slightly twisted, could affect a person’s later on life pattern and personality. That’s where a good or bad education makes difference.
譴責學習教育,沒有注重培養學生健全人格!!
In summary, if only we could generate a healthier social conduct, if only the gap between the rich and the poor could be narrowed, if only the quality of school education could be bettered, the anti-social behaviors will be eliminated greatly and the society of mutual-respect will rise up again.
與話題相關的詞匯
Modern society 當代社會
Social conduct 社會風氣
Social status 社會地位
Disrespectful to… 對..不尊重的
School education 學校教育
Extremist極端主義者
Borderline man/person社會邊緣人物
高分詞匯、詞組
Twisted 扭曲的
Morbid 病態的
Fiasco大失敗
Trigger扣動扳機,激發
Stir激起,喚起
Condemn譴責
Juvenile years 青少年時代
Adolescence青春期
Mutual-respect 互相尊重
Conformity mentality 從眾心理
The psychology of hatred仇富心理
social stratification社會分層(乃高階社會學單詞)
Manual worker 體力勞動者
Mental imbalance 心理不平衡
Humble birth出生貧寒的,地位粗鄙的
Complete and sound personality 完整健全的人格
Mould(英) Mold(美)用模子做,陶冶,形成
The widening gap 日益拉大的趨勢
an irresistible momentum 一種不可逆的趨勢
An Increasingly prevailing phenomenon 一個逐漸普遍的趨勢
高分句型
1. With the development of modern society, there seems to be an irresistible uprising momentum of anti-social behaviors and lacking
in respect between people.(一種不可逆的上升趨勢,開頭就像轟炸機一下給你當頭一棒,起評分就定位在 7 分以上了)
2. A healthy social conduct will guide people, on the contrary, an unhealthy society can destroy the very good nature of people.(B 老師我名人名言一般的高度精煉語言組織,這種語言出來基本肯定是 8+的分數了)
3. If there were a more harmonious social conduct to give more sense of belonging to that pervert killer, the tragedy could be prevented.
(緊接著一句虛擬語氣,繼續轟炸你的閱讀神經)
4. The enlarging social stratification and the growing income gap between the white-collars and manual workers stir the mental imbalance as well as the call on unfairness among the people with
humble birth.(不管是無比高大上的 social stratification 還是小詞 stir 和 call on 的使用,都讓這句話看上去像是從哪本社會性書上抄的,所以考官看到這里已經在 8.5 和 9 分之間徘徊、猶豫了)
5. The formation of individual’s property and character molded during juvenile years, especially, adolescence, which, if slightly twisted,
could affect a person’s later on life pattern and personality.(連續的逗號使用,就是不出現句號,再加上賓語從句,合情合理,句子結構清晰,考官終于忍不住給 9 分了?。。。?p>
讓我們來舉個例子,如下面關于“work at home or study at home”的一段例證:
IBM, one of the business giants, has saved nearly 70 million US dollars in its northeastern region by promoting telecommuting, which has been a driving force to other enterprises to convert their normal working staff into telecommuters. Companies in Japan are one of them and plan to launch the scheme in 2009, which, in turn, spiritually wins more supports from the existing employees, and attracts new hires. 這段話中的2個例子(商業巨頭IBM和日本的企業計劃)都較好地完成了“若員工選擇在家上班,會對公司帶來積極的作用”這一證明。
此外,提醒考生們需要注意的是,雅思大作文明確指出“give reasons or examples from your own experience”, 這里的“your own experience”和“your personal experience”是完全不同的概念。前者是指通過個人的學習和總結而獲得的經驗,后者是指個人經歷或周圍某個個體的故事。如談到“working hard produces better results”, “your own experience”的例子一定是“some 3-year-high school students usually stay up late to review lessons and prepare for next day classes”, 而“your personal experience”的例子則應該是“my roommate, Tony has always been working hard on studies and staying up late every night”, 不難看出兩者的區別。
此外,數據論證也是一個重要的方法,同時也是國外文章中非常常見的。使用這種方式,需要注意兩點:數據和數據的來源。數據的真實性不重要,但至少要看上去是“真實的”。小站雅思老師建議,使用數據論證,提醒考生們不要刻意將數據夸張,這樣反而會降低數據的真實可靠性。常見的句型有“a survey by….shows that / a research by….finds out that / a study by….suggests that / Statistics by….conclude that…”省略號的部分是需要根據文章的內容來填寫的數據來源出處或機構。
小站提醒:常用的機構包括:國外大學、學院、報紙、雜志、電視臺、之聲、網站、研究機構、民意調查等。我們按順序給大家做一個示范:the University of Sussex, Business College of several European countries, the USATODAY, state media CNN, BBC Talking Point, Childwise.com, American Institute for Research, Harris Interactive Poll等,考生可按照自己的情況,來準備幾個備選方案以供使用。
以上就是小站老師總結的關于雅思寫作考試幾種論證方法,希望考生們能夠借此學習,應該如何充分論證。
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